I really like the idea and what you did so far. Each girl has their own stories and personalities, that's great.
If you're interested in suggestions :
I think you could add some background color code on the choices when it comes to the "give or take" question. Like red / green or blue / brown, or whatever is your taste.
This one is more of a personal taste than anything : At the intro of the main character you could make a more confident description of himself to make it more immersive and make the "take" path more of a personality logic and the "give" path more of a natural urge.
Otherwise so far so good, can't wait for the next updates 👍
I've commented here before, and I was curious about something. Is there gonna be a choice to go back to a club in the future? I understand you most likely have to get all the clubs set up in order to make this happen, but I'd like to know if you want to add that in the future. Ciao for now!
I'm not sure if this is intentional (I don't think it is) but the background characters have blue skin. I'm sure it's just "I don't have the models complete" but I'd like to know why this is the case. A fun game, however, and I'm excited for future updates!
Background characters having blue skin was an intentional decision. I thought making a hallway filled with characters would be much too distracting from things happening in the foreground. I'll play around with it a bit more, thanks for the feedback!
This looks quiet promising albeit it is also a bit barebones (as expect for a 0.1). If you are looking for an example of a hypnosis related visual novel Penlight is excellent. I don’t expect you to be as accurate about hypnosis as that visual novel, but being aware of it i find the Elene (occult) route has huge pacing issues with things going way to fast. Would you be interested in more elaborate feedback?
Do you have plans to track the sub dom choice ratio and give different choices depending on that in the future or will it stay “memoryless”?
Also was the going to the beach scene jumping into the water inspired by some movie or as a murder weapon in a crime drama?
I totally understand that. Besides studying references (such as the different routes in penlight) having a conversation about it with your community is probably important in particular in the early phase when less is set in stone. I have stopped myself from giving more elaborate feedback as i wasn’t sure you if you welcome it and i don’t have a clear idea of your vision.
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You should play the “tell Nozomi you’ve been practicing hypnosis”&date routes for an idea how fast a hypnosis relationship can progress at most even if both are already familiar with hypnosis which i don’t think is the case with your main character. I have some ideas how to address this elegantly which i would like to talk about but i don’t want to be a unwelcome giver of advice either.
Lol the csi similarity's are real, cool that you found that!
The hypnosis in Give or take doesn't have to follow a realistic pace, I'm fine with characters being put into a trance easily. I have a lot of ideas for hypnosis related content and I intend to have Elene focused solely on hypno content. I'm also trying to keep different events somewhat similar in length. This is because I have a limited amount of time available to me and I want to try out a bunch of different fetishes and routes within the story.
Haven't had time so far to play penlight, I'll give it a go tomorrow.
As for my vision, every club will have a fetish that it focuses on, for now I'm planning on five different clubs so I can fill up a school week. What those clubs are going to be is a secret for now.
Feedback is much appreciated and giving advice is great as well. However don't expect me to follow up on every point of advice, sometimes it can simply be too much work to change minor details after the fact.
Thanks for the elaborate comment, I appreciate the time you are taking to give me some feedback!
I hoped you had fun and dread with Penlight. Planning to have 5 clubs makes a me hold you hypnosis content to different standard then if it was one of two routes. I also replayed the Elene branched trying to figure out why it seemed so rapey. I see conflict between
the main character being doubtful about the power of hypnosis
MC nailing the induction
MC going to install triggers as the first thing he does and MC being comfortable with such wide ranging consent without further consent questioning makes him kinda seem like a psychopath or utterly naive but super studied in hypnosis. I also wouldn’t call that what happened with taking the gem out of the hand consensual hypnosis. It is at best (but i think it would just be non-consent) consensual non consent (CNC).
I have a suggestion how to fix it with minor adjustments that would also play into an object already established in the game world (a notebook). Would you like it to hear it and be free to use it if you like it[1]?
Independent of that you might want to steal the “record with phone for consent to trick” from penlight. Benefits i see:
Realism: Subjects can lose memory of what happens even if there instructions not to forget anything in my experience
Hotness: Elene could admit that she relistenened to some files and really enjoy it
Interaction between clubs: having the ability to listen to certain files (which might also come from the internet and not just Elene) before a certain club interactions might work well with some club kinks (pain resistance, better pee/cum holding, getting/not getting hard, extra immersed in roleplay , … [2] )
(spoiler) A way to do memory play: A session can just be blank with triggers that play out in the later days the player is not aware off and gets resolved later when MC is given the recording/transcript.
As for CSI, yes ones i remember the punchable of face of some of the characters i got a feeling that it was some CSI think and not bones or a similar show.
[1] No obligations or strings, I don’t insist on credit.
[2] Random kinks that could work with that and that shouldn’t influence your club choices
I like recording the sessions on the phone a lot, had some other plans with audio files as well (bit of a spoiler I guess). Recording the session would really help out on the consensual side of things. I also find the current explanation for preventing memory loss a bit shaky.
I intend to keep clubs separated for the most part with characters interacting mainly with the player and others in the same club. The amount of possible routes becomes exponentially bigger when two characters with multiple paths meet.
I'm more interested in concepts than fleshed out ideas, I want to write my own story's and telling me an idea would almost prevent me from using it since I didn't think of it on my own. Concepts like recording the session for instance are great!
So far I'm having fun with Penlight, but with the comments I've read I'm sure the dread will set in pretty soon. :P
For now I'm mainly focused on developing the story of Give or Take, Ill look into android builds in a couple of months. If it's somewhat easy to implement I'll make an Android build as well.
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please, anyone...take it and rework...and continues^^
what a loser
has this game been abandoned?
this game is good. but i was wondering if this was going to be updated?
Patreon was nuked not sure if this project is dead for good or not
I really like the idea and what you did so far. Each girl has their own stories and personalities, that's great.
If you're interested in suggestions :
I think you could add some background color code on the choices when it comes to the "give or take" question. Like red / green or blue / brown, or whatever is your taste.
This one is more of a personal taste than anything : At the intro of the main character you could make a more confident description of himself to make it more immersive and make the "take" path more of a personality logic and the "give" path more of a natural urge.
Otherwise so far so good, can't wait for the next updates 👍
I've commented here before, and I was curious about something. Is there gonna be a choice to go back to a club in the future? I understand you most likely have to get all the clubs set up in order to make this happen, but I'd like to know if you want to add that in the future. Ciao for now!
Enjoyed what was there.
I'm not sure if this is intentional (I don't think it is) but the background characters have blue skin. I'm sure it's just "I don't have the models complete" but I'd like to know why this is the case. A fun game, however, and I'm excited for future updates!
Not only background characters, also Elene in one scene has partially blue skin.
This is not intentional, on what route did you see this?
In the Elene route, in particular the arms are blueish which is really noticeable in the swimsuit route.
She is wearing gloves in those scenes. Although there is some minor clipping that makes this less clear. Thanks for the feedback as always!
That just doesn’t look like gloves to me. Also there seem to be blue spots on the belly.
Background characters having blue skin was an intentional decision. I thought making a hallway filled with characters would be much too distracting from things happening in the foreground. I'll play around with it a bit more, thanks for the feedback!
I've decided to remove the blue skinned characters and replace them with actual models. It's coming with the 0.2 update.
This looks quiet promising albeit it is also a bit barebones (as expect for a 0.1). If you are looking for an example of a hypnosis related visual novel Penlight is excellent. I don’t expect you to be as accurate about hypnosis as that visual novel, but being aware of it i find the Elene (occult) route has huge pacing issues with things going way to fast. Would you be interested in more elaborate feedback?
Do you have plans to track the sub dom choice ratio and give different choices depending on that in the future or will it stay “memoryless”?
Also was the going to the beach scene jumping into the water inspired by some movie or as a murder weapon in a crime drama?
Thanks for the feedback!
The pacing of hypnosis content is still pretty difficult to me, I'll look into it a bit more, thanks for the recommendation BTW :)
The Sub/Dom choices will result in different routes so they will impact game play later as well.
The beach scene wasn't really inspired by anything in particular. I was just looking for an image that would be serene and relaxing.
Thanks for taking the time to play my game! I hope you will stay interested in future updates.
I totally understand that. Besides studying references (such as the different routes in penlight) having a conversation about it with your community is probably important in particular in the early phase when less is set in stone. I have stopped myself from giving more elaborate feedback as i wasn’t sure you if you welcome it and i don’t have a clear idea of your vision.
You should play the “tell Nozomi you’ve been practicing hypnosis”&date routes for an idea how fast a hypnosis relationship can progress at most even if both are already familiar with hypnosis which i don’t think is the case with your main character. I have some ideas how to address this elegantly which i would like to talk about but i don’t want to be a unwelcome giver of advice either.
It reminded me of a plot point in one episode of CSI Las Vegas which is why i was curious.
Yes.
Lol the csi similarity's are real, cool that you found that!
The hypnosis in Give or take doesn't have to follow a realistic pace, I'm fine with characters being put into a trance easily. I have a lot of ideas for hypnosis related content and I intend to have Elene focused solely on hypno content. I'm also trying to keep different events somewhat similar in length. This is because I have a limited amount of time available to me and I want to try out a bunch of different fetishes and routes within the story.
Haven't had time so far to play penlight, I'll give it a go tomorrow.
As for my vision, every club will have a fetish that it focuses on, for now I'm planning on five different clubs so I can fill up a school week. What those clubs are going to be is a secret for now.
Feedback is much appreciated and giving advice is great as well. However don't expect me to follow up on every point of advice, sometimes it can simply be too much work to change minor details after the fact.
Thanks for the elaborate comment, I appreciate the time you are taking to give me some feedback!
I hoped you had fun and dread with Penlight. Planning to have 5 clubs makes a me hold you hypnosis content to different standard then if it was one of two routes. I also replayed the Elene branched trying to figure out why it seemed so rapey. I see conflict between
MC going to install triggers as the first thing he does and MC being comfortable with such wide ranging consent without further consent questioning makes him kinda seem like a psychopath or utterly naive but super studied in hypnosis. I also wouldn’t call that what happened with taking the gem out of the hand consensual hypnosis. It is at best (but i think it would just be non-consent) consensual non consent (CNC).
I have a suggestion how to fix it with minor adjustments that would also play into an object already established in the game world (a notebook). Would you like it to hear it and be free to use it if you like it[1]?
Independent of that you might want to steal the “record with phone for consent to trick” from penlight. Benefits i see:
As for CSI, yes ones i remember the punchable of face of some of the characters i got a feeling that it was some CSI think and not bones or a similar show.
[1] No obligations or strings, I don’t insist on credit.
[2] Random kinks that could work with that and that shouldn’t influence your club choices
I like recording the sessions on the phone a lot, had some other plans with audio files as well (bit of a spoiler I guess). Recording the session would really help out on the consensual side of things. I also find the current explanation for preventing memory loss a bit shaky.
I intend to keep clubs separated for the most part with characters interacting mainly with the player and others in the same club. The amount of possible routes becomes exponentially bigger when two characters with multiple paths meet.
I'm more interested in concepts than fleshed out ideas, I want to write my own story's and telling me an idea would almost prevent me from using it since I didn't think of it on my own. Concepts like recording the session for instance are great!
So far I'm having fun with Penlight, but with the comments I've read I'm sure the dread will set in pretty soon. :P
Hey do you ever plan on having this game run on Android. A friend recommended it to me so I wanted to check it out
For now I'm mainly focused on developing the story of Give or Take, Ill look into android builds in a couple of months. If it's somewhat easy to implement I'll make an Android build as well.
Hey, found your game here and shared it on our site HERE feel free to join our huge community to see reviews and interact with fans of your game. Good luck!
Thanks a lot!
No problem I like to give games I like more eyes. Helps with development time and quality when devs see how much their games are liked.